First half of the poem is up. Criticism, please.


A Poetic Observation. pt.1A Poetic Observation By: James MillerA Poetic Observation. pt.1
Part. 1
I see the edges, frayed and gray. The threads are loose with signs of decay, while twitching fingers tug away, and strings unravel faster each day, for the clawing hands wont be kept at bay, by the best of efforts and in our dismay, we forfeit our hearts, so the butcher can flay, the mouths of the needy, till the rich get their pay.
Some chew the fat while others gnaw bone. Some huddle en mass and some die alone, while fires in drums burn light which has shown, the faces of those who live
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I am the Proud Heretic, the Immortal by choice. I bow to no god or man. I will not censor my voice. I stand tall and fearless, and mean what I say. I will not be defeated, and will not go away.
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See enough horror and experience enough pain and you become separated from your self.
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An artist must create as often as possible. To cease this task is, to the soul of an artist, as ceasing to breathe.
- ETY
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I am the Proud Heretic, the Immortal by choice. I bow to no god or man. I will not censor my voice. I stand tall and fearless, and mean what I say. I will not be defeated, and will not go away.
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Thats what she said.
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I am the Proud Heretic, the Immortal by choice. I bow to no god or man. I will not censor my voice. I stand tall and fearless, and mean what I say. I will not be defeated, and will not go away.
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See enough horror and experience enough pain and you become separated from your self.
- ETY
An artist must create as often as possible. To cease this task is, to the soul of an artist, as ceasing to breathe.
- ETY
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I am the Proud Heretic, the Immortal by choice. I bow to no god or man. I will not censor my voice. I stand tall and fearless, and mean what I say. I will not be defeated, and will not go away.
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The Beauty of Art Comes From Its Freedom...
KnightmanProductions.com
[link]
My gallery [link]
My DA Prints [link]
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